I choose the first: Choose another holiday from your country and write about it.
I choose The Spring Festival.
The Spring Festival is the most important festival in China . It’s to celebrate the lunar calendar ‘s new year . It is also a happy and reunited day. Why is it a happy and reunited holiday? In the evening before the Spring Festival ,families get together and have a big meal .No matter how busy people will eat together. Talk about what happened over the past year. In many places people like to set off firecrackers .Ad there also has a legend about set off firecrackers. Long long time ago, there was a big monster whose name is Nian. People scared it long time. When people set off firecrackers, Nian ran away and never came back. People feel happy when they eat together and set off firecrackers together. Also, people like to eat dumplings. Dumplings are the most traditional food .Children like the festival very much ,because they can have delicious food and wear new clothes .They can also get some money from their parents. This money is given to children for good luck . People put New Year scrolls on the wall for good fortune .
I choose The Spring Festival.
The Spring Festival is the most important festival in China . It’s to celebrate the lunar calendar ‘s new year . It is also a happy and reunited day. Why is it a happy and reunited holiday? In the evening before the Spring Festival ,families get together and have a big meal .No matter how busy people will eat together. Talk about what happened over the past year. In many places people like to set off firecrackers .Ad there also has a legend about set off firecrackers. Long long time ago, there was a big monster whose name is Nian. People scared it long time. When people set off firecrackers, Nian ran away and never came back. People feel happy when they eat together and set off firecrackers together. Also, people like to eat dumplings. Dumplings are the most traditional food .Children like the festival very much ,because they can have delicious food and wear new clothes .They can also get some money from their parents. This money is given to children for good luck . People put New Year scrolls on the wall for good fortune .
The Spring Festival lasts about 15 days long .People visit relatives and friends with the words “Have all your wishes ”. People enjoy the Spring Festival ,during this time they can have a good rest.
ReplyDeleteHi lucy, your article is so interesting to read. Here are my suggestions for you. First, it's important for you to underline your major supporting sentences. Secondly, it will be better if you add an important word to support your major sentences like "In addition, furthermore and so on" instead of using "and" over and over again. Overall, I really like your article and of course I can't wait to see your next article. Good job and keep it up :)
Thank you very much, I will do it
Deletei really like ur article and it seems very interesting.i just wanna waiting for ur next new one.
ReplyDeletehahaha, thank u .Love you.
DeleteHello ,Lucy. The spring festival is my favorite holiday. In this festival, there will be a lot of interesting things happen. Your topic sentence is so short but it is clearly. For the structure of the article, I think the conclude sentence is not clearly. The conclude sentence come too suddenly. It just my idea, Thank you .
ReplyDeleteThanks for giving your advice.
DeleteSo that is what people talked about the spring festival in China. Thank you for the explanation lucy! But I found out that you made a little mistake in writing the post. "No matter how busy people will eat together" I think what do you mean: ""No matter how busy are the people, they will have a time to eat together" . Fighting lucy!
ReplyDeleteOK, got it, thank u so much ya
Deletehello lucy, we choose the same holliday to write,your paragraph is good too.I think the article of topic is very clear and the content is very rich.good job
ReplyDeletethank you
DeleteHi Lucy i really intrested With your post. That celebrate must be So fun. But I think before you start your paragraph, It's better if you write your main topic And sub topic from your paragraph. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteGOOD advice. thank u
Deletethis is a good topic, you had to be exited during your holiday. but in your article there r some mistakes, but it doesn't matter. i hope you can do better than now. be nice for no reason. wyatb
ReplyDeletehahaha, thanks for reading my article and giving me ur advice.
DeleteThat's a good work, Lucy. I just have one suggestion that's you have to careful in punctuation. Put the . (dot) before the space and after the last letter, not after the space. Alright, good work.
ReplyDeleteok, thank u
Deletehi lucy.
ReplyDeleteyour paragraph is very good. i can see your main topic and the conclusion sentence. the grammar was good too.
fighting !
Thank you , fighting!
DeleteI choose the first: Choose another holiday from your country and write about it.
ReplyDeleteI choose The Spring Festival.
The Spring Festival is the most important festival in China . It’s to celebrate the lunar calendar ‘s new year . It is also a happy and reunited day. Why is it a happy and reunited holiday? In the evening before the Spring Festival ,families get together and have a big meal .No matter how busy are the people, they will have a time to eat together. Talk about what happened over the past year. In many places people like to set off firecrackers .In addition, there also has a legend about set off firecrackers. Long long time ago, there was a big monster whose name is Nian. People scared it long time. When people set off firecrackers, Nian ran away and never came back. People feel happy when they eat together and set off firecrackers together. Furthermore, people like to eat dumplings. Dumplings are the most traditional food .Children like the festival very much ,because they can have delicious food and wear new clothes .They can also get some money from their parents. This money is given to children for good luck . People put New Year scrolls on the wall for good fortune .
The Spring Festival lasts about 15 days long .People visit relatives and friends with the words “Have all your wishes ”. People enjoy the Spring Festival ,during this time they can have a good rest.