1, Write about the life of an important person or inventor in your country's history.
Topic sentence: Qin Shihuang is the first emperor's feudal dynasty monarch.
Sub sentences: Qin Shihuang created the emperor system, managed the national affairs.
Qin Shihuang put China to the unified era.
He was the first emperor's fedual dynasty monarch. Qin Shihuang created the emperor system, managed the national affairs. Local abolition of subseal system, on behalf of the country system, unified weighing. North to build the Great Wall, the constuction of LingQu, maintain the water system.But also put China to the unified era. For the establishment of authoritarian centralization sustem to create a new situation. It has a profound impact on China and world history. Qin from the 230 BC, just 10 years Marged with sic countries, set up counties in the occupied area. From the end of the aristocratic royal dictatorship of the kingdom of the times, into the monarchy of the imperial area.
Qin Shihuang, surname is Ying, name Zheng. Born in Zhao city capital Handan. Thirteen years old inherited the throne, thirty-nine years old emperor, reigned thirty-seven years.
2, Describe an important building or monument in your country.
Topic sentence: The Great Wall is the world's most magnificent construction, is unique in human history.
Sub sentences: The Great Wall spans many provinces and autonomus regions.
The Great Wall has the most prominent feature.
The Great Wall, magnificent, is the ancient Chinese people to create a miracle, is the world's most magnidicent construction. In addition, it is an unique in human history. The Great Wall east of Hebei province, shanhaiguan. West of Gansu province jiayuguan, it spans seven provinces and autonomous regions, twists and turns stretches up to 6,700km, so called "Great Wall". The most prominent feature of the Great Wall is:across mountains, across th desert, through the glasslands, the cliffs, with ups and downs of the mountains and the building. On the walls there are many two-storey fortress, the top of the platform, surrounded by crenellations,hope holes, easy to look and attack, the lower brick room, can live soldiers and reserves of food and weapons. The Great Wall is a micracle of human activities, is a monument in the history of huamn civilizatiton. But also the wisdom and strength of Chinese nation and the symbol of unyielding spirit. As a result, the Great Wall has been listed as a "world cultural and natural heritage" by the United Nations.
3, Explain an important day, year, or dacade in your county's history.
Topic sentence: On October 1, 1949, the central people's government og the people's republic of China was established.
Sub senences: Mao Zedong anounced that " the central people's government og the people's republic of China set up tody."
Rise flag.
On October 1, 1949, the central people's government og the people's republic of China was established and held ceremony in Beijing. Mao Zedong anounced that " the central people's government og the people's republic of China set up tody." In addition, it declared to the world the establishment of the new China ended China's more than 100 years of being invaded and enslaved humiliation history. Become a truly independent country. Followed by the national flag. hairman Mao pressed the electric pole. the new China's flag-five-star red flag slowly rising, three hundred thousand people together from the hat stand , together raised his head, pay attention to this bright red flag. When the flag is raised, the salute bells sounded. Each ring is 54 cannon hair, a total of 28 ring. At first,after each sound gun, the audience sounded a thunderous applause. After the founding of the people's republic of China, although there have been some problems in political and economic construction, under the leadership of the communist party of China, a politial stability, economic prosperity and social stability of China has been presented in the world.
Topic sentence: Qin Shihuang is the first emperor's feudal dynasty monarch.Sub sentences: Qin Shihuang created the emperor system, managed the national affairs.
Qin Shihuang put China to the unified era.
He was the first emperor's fedual dynasty monarch. Qin Shihuang created the emperor system, managed the national affairs. Local abolition of subseal system, on behalf of the country system, unified weighing. North to build the Great Wall, the constuction of LingQu, maintain the water system.But also put China to the unified era. For the establishment of authoritarian centralization sustem to create a new situation. It has a profound impact on China and world history. Qin from the 230 BC, just 10 years Marged with sic countries, set up counties in the occupied area. From the end of the aristocratic royal dictatorship of the kingdom of the times, into the monarchy of the imperial area.
Qin Shihuang, surname is Ying, name Zheng. Born in Zhao city capital Handan. Thirteen years old inherited the throne, thirty-nine years old emperor, reigned thirty-seven years.
2, Describe an important building or monument in your country.
Topic sentence: The Great Wall is the world's most magnificent construction, is unique in human history.
Sub sentences: The Great Wall spans many provinces and autonomus regions.
The Great Wall has the most prominent feature.
The Great Wall, magnificent, is the ancient Chinese people to create a miracle, is the world's most magnidicent construction. In addition, it is an unique in human history. The Great Wall east of Hebei province, shanhaiguan. West of Gansu province jiayuguan, it spans seven provinces and autonomous regions, twists and turns stretches up to 6,700km, so called "Great Wall". The most prominent feature of the Great Wall is:across mountains, across th desert, through the glasslands, the cliffs, with ups and downs of the mountains and the building. On the walls there are many two-storey fortress, the top of the platform, surrounded by crenellations,hope holes, easy to look and attack, the lower brick room, can live soldiers and reserves of food and weapons. The Great Wall is a micracle of human activities, is a monument in the history of huamn civilizatiton. But also the wisdom and strength of Chinese nation and the symbol of unyielding spirit. As a result, the Great Wall has been listed as a "world cultural and natural heritage" by the United Nations.
3, Explain an important day, year, or dacade in your county's history.
Topic sentence: On October 1, 1949, the central people's government og the people's republic of China was established.
Sub senences: Mao Zedong anounced that " the central people's government og the people's republic of China set up tody."
Rise flag.
On October 1, 1949, the central people's government og the people's republic of China was established and held ceremony in Beijing. Mao Zedong anounced that " the central people's government og the people's republic of China set up tody." In addition, it declared to the world the establishment of the new China ended China's more than 100 years of being invaded and enslaved humiliation history. Become a truly independent country. Followed by the national flag. hairman Mao pressed the electric pole. the new China's flag-five-star red flag slowly rising, three hundred thousand people together from the hat stand , together raised his head, pay attention to this bright red flag. When the flag is raised, the salute bells sounded. Each ring is 54 cannon hair, a total of 28 ring. At first,after each sound gun, the audience sounded a thunderous applause. After the founding of the people's republic of China, although there have been some problems in political and economic construction, under the leadership of the communist party of China, a politial stability, economic prosperity and social stability of China has been presented in the world.


hi YUE, Your article is so good . Each of your paragraph has the topic and subtopics. But it is better if you change you conclusion sentence,make them have more concise statement. Thanks .
ReplyDeleteThank you very much, i will change it.
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ReplyDeleteHi Lucy, your article is so interesting to read. The main idea and the subtopic are so clearly. My suggestion for you is "Qin Shihuang created.... and manage...." should be "Qin Shihuang created..... and managed.....".Overall, you really did a great job and of course I look forward to seeing your next article. Keep it up :)
ok, got it. thank u so much .
DeleteHello Yue, I really like your article, the Great Wall should spans 15 provinces and autonomous regions, but isn't seven.Good job.
ReplyDeleteBut I search it is spans 7, maybe is the part of it. thank u .
DeleteHi lucy ! I really like your paragraph . I can learn more about china from your paragraph . And it's easy to find which the topic and the subtopics .
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DeleteHello Lucy, nice post. But dont forget the title of the parapgraph should be written in capital and also you can put conjunction word (ex: And, that, which, etc.) to connect every sentences. For example on the 2nd sentence in paragraph 1 "Qin Shihuang created the emperor system, managed the national affairs"
ReplyDeleteThanks for your suggestions. i wil rewrite it.
DeleteOur country has such long history,and there are so many great people influenced or still influencing our daily life.The men that we will always respect.
ReplyDeletethank u
DeleteHi Lucy. That’s a good paragraph. I already learned about China history from your paragraph. But I think you need to underline your sub topic also. I the reader Will can understand your sub topic easly. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteok, i will. thank u so much.
Delete1, Write about the life of an important person or inventor in your country's history.
ReplyDeleteTopic sentence: Qin Shihuang is the first emperor's feudal dynasty monarch.
Sub sentences: Qin Shihuang created the emperor system, managed the national affairs.
Qin Shihuang put China to the unified era.
He was the first emperor's fedual dynasty monarch. Qin Shihuang created the emperor system, managed the national affairs. Local abolition of subseal system, on behalf of the country system, unified weighing. North to build the Great Wall, the constuction of LingQu, maintain the water system.But also put China to the unified era. For the establishment of authoritarian centralization sustem to create a new situation. It has a profound impact on China and world history. Qin from the 230 BC, just 10 years Marged with sic countries, set up counties in the occupied area. From the end of the aristocratic royal dictatorship of the kingdom of the times, into the monarchy of the imperial area.
Qin Shihuang, surname is Ying, name Zheng. Born in Zhao city capital Handan. Thirteen years old inherited the throne, thirty-nine years old emperor, reigned thirty-seven years.
2, Describe an important building or monument in your country.
ReplyDeleteTopic sentence: The Great Wall is the world's most magnificent construction, is unique in human history.
Sub sentences: The Great Wall spans many provinces and autonomus regions.
The Great Wall has the most prominent feature.
The Great Wall, magnificent, is the ancient Chinese people to create a miracle, is the world's most magnidicent construction. In addition, it is an unique in human history. The Great Wall east of Hebei province, shanhaiguan. West of Gansu province jiayuguan, it spans seven provinces and autonomous regions, twists and turns stretches up to 6,700km, so called "Great Wall". The most prominent feature of the Great Wall is:across mountains, across th desert, through the glasslands, the cliffs, with ups and downs of the mountains and the building. On the walls there are many two-storey fortress, the top of the platform, surrounded by crenellations,hope holes, easy to look and attack, the lower brick room, can live soldiers and reserves of food and weapons. The Great Wall is a micracle of human activities, is a monument in the history of huamn civilizatiton. But also the wisdom and strength of Chinese nation and the symbol of unyielding spirit. As a result, the Great Wall has been listed as a "world cultural and natural heritage" by the United Nations.
3, Explain an important day, year, or dacade in your county's history.
Topic sentence: On October 1, 1949, the central people's government og the people's republic of China was established.
Sub senences: Mao Zedong anounced that " the central people's government og the people's republic of China set up tody."
Rise flag.
On October 1, 1949, the central people's government og the people's republic of China was established and held ceremony in Beijing. Mao Zedong anounced that " the central people's government og the people's republic of China set up tody." In addition, it declared to the world the establishment of the new China ended China's more than 100 years of being invaded and enslaved humiliation history. Become a truly independent country. Followed by the national flag. hairman Mao pressed the electric pole. the new China's flag-five-star red flag slowly rising, three hundred thousand people together from the hat stand , together raised his head, pay attention to this bright red flag. When the flag is raised, the salute bells sounded. Each ring is 54 cannon hair, a total of 28 ring. At first,after each sound gun, the audience sounded a thunderous applause. After the founding of the people's republic of China, although there have been some problems in political and economic construction, under the leadership of the communist party of China, a politial stability, economic prosperity and social stability of China has been presented in the world.
Hi lucy ,I think the paragraph you write is very good, especially the second paragraph, which describes the Great Wall in detail. Let me know more about the charm of the Great Wall and hope to keep it
ReplyDeletehello lucy, This article is written very well, the article points to write a very clear, highlight the importance of this person or this thing.
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